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People who live in a city lack a sense of communication. Even they don't know their neighbors. Why is this the case? Is it important to have a good relationship with neighbors?

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People who live in a
city
 lack sense of communication. It's right because
city
 population is a lot and
also
 population is proceeding to
increasing
Suggestion
increase
. Because
population
Suggestion
the population
populations
 of rural
abandon
Suggestion
abandons
 to village from compulsion. Mainly, they go to the
city
 for a job. When they come
city
, they don'
t
 recognize anyone
therefore
 they lack sense of communication. Some people don'
t
 know their
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. There are several reasons. Some people are very busy. They come to house only for sleep
that is
 why they don'
t
 recognize them. As well the temper influences to
this
 topic. Shy people must be communicated by other
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 if they want to know each other. It is important to have
good relationship
Suggestion
a good relationship
 with
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 because in the emergency situation
first
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 come to help. Of course, don'
t
 belong all of them. In my view, duration of
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 affect to that because anyone doesn'
t
 trust that recognize during the short time.
For example
, if we compared to old and new apartment we would be witness old apartments citizens are
more kind
Suggestion
kinder
 than
new apartment's citizen
Suggestion
new apartment's citizens
. My family members and
me
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 are very friendly with our
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. I accustomed to my
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 because my childhood friends are my
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
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