The increase in mobile phone use in recent years has transformed the way we live, communicate and do business. Mobile phones can also be the cause of social or medical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of mobile phones?

Over the decades, the usability of mobile phones has drastically raised and which leads to improved lifestyles, work and ways of communication, whereas it
also
has adverse effects on
peoples
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people's
well-being as well as
community
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the community
. But, I believe with mobile phones where long distances have been eliminated
also
their excess use result into people well-being and community.
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With
the advance
technology mobile
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technology, mobile
phones
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phone
communication
have completely changed
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has completely changed
people
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peoples'
peoples
lives.
Firstly
, mobile has become
a
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an
important part of our life.
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With
latest technology phones various
task
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tasks
can be performed at
same time
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the same time
.
For example
, with the help of fitness application people can maintain
health
record
such
as how may steps they
done
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have done
are done
, track their meal plans and how much water intake have in a
day
and so on.
Also
, phones used for adding reminders, alarms, for calculations, listening music tracks, checking mails and
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much
more.
Moreover
, mobile phones inventions have reduced made
longer
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long
distance into shorter as well as they are portable and easy to use. People can communicate with their family, friends and relatives in any part of the world
also
, can see other while making calls.
For example
, with
number
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a number
the number
of video calling applications people can have live calling with their love one even though, nowadays employer can conduct online interviews as well as with video conference calling is
good source
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a good source
of connecting with different part of
world
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the world
and it leads to business expansions. On the contrast, mobile phones have
negatively impact
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a negative impact
negative impact
on people
health
and society.
Firstly
, mobile phones
emit
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emits
number
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a number
of radiations that can cause serious
health
issues to people.
For example
, as per the researchers if
person
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a person
the person
uses
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has used
has been using
mobile more than an hour a
day
for over ten years have a higher rate of getting brain cancer
also
other
health
issues
such
as headaches, insomnia, heart problems and many more.
Furthermore
, with excess usage of mobile phones it
also effecting
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is also effecting
society. People grounded themselves with their mobile phone
at
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in
one place and
as a result
, they don’t mingle with their friends and relatives. They are more socially
active on
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active, on
more active on
more active more active on
their mobiles than in
real world
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the real world
. In conclusion, I believe that mobile phones play an important role in our
day
to
day
routine
moreover
, it reduces long distance with just one phone
call but
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call, but
,
also
excess of everything is worse and can influence many people
health
and society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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