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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Artists require a certain amount of
freedom
 for the development of their
creativity whereas
Accept comma addition
creativity, whereas
 it is thought by some people that artists must have complete
freedom
 for the
expression
 of any thoughts and ideas. In my opinion, I believe that though art is a form of human
expression
 and is vital for everyone, providing complete
freedom
 to express all sorts of ideas would have detrimental effects on individuals and society. Innovative ideas which are portrayed through music, paintings and films are very beneficial for the community.
For example
, the most famous Italian painter Leonardo Da Vinci provided the world with the great idea of flying in an aeroplane
although
 it was something unimaginable and unheard of by the people in that era.
Such
 paintings give individuals opportunities to invent something remarkable which greatly benefits mankind up to the present day.
On the other hand
, when religion, casts and deities are wrongly represented by artists, it can cause havoc.
For instance
, the Bollywood movie Padmavat, directed by a well-known Indian director, stirred mayhem in the Northern parts of India as it portrayed cast systems which are considered reprehensible by the citizens.
Moreover
, political unrest and instability
was
Suggestion
were also caused
also
 caused due to the
freedom
 of
expression
 by the director. In conclusion, art must be a safe and beneficial form of
expression
 to the society and must not be a reason for creating unrest.
Therefore
, in order to maintain peace and harmony around the world, I believe that artists should not have complete
freedom
 of expressing their thoughts and ideas.
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