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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is undeniably that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
air
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 has been increasingly popular worldwide. While some people think that cheap
air
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 flights offer middle-class people more chances to move, others argue that they can cause severe environmental pollution. In my viewpoints, the cons of cheap
air
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 airlines outweigh the pros. On the one hand, it is recognized that people have more chances to move nowadays than before thanks to modern transportation. The more society develops, the more opportunities we get to travel, especially for people with little money. Cheap
air
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 flights help them to save lots of money. The increasing number of
air
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 flights with low cost encourages
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 to move and explore new places. What is more, airlines with reasonable price are playing a significant role in boosting the development of tourism in a nation.
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, opponents argue that cheap airlines should be prohibited despite their gargantuan advantages.
Firstly
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, that more and more
airplanes
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 are manufactured and operated may increase
air
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 pollution. Plane exhaust directly affects the environment,
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 impacts greatly on human health.
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, the loud sound from
airplanes engine
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airplanes, engine
 causes a negative effect on residents living near the airports, exposing to noise pollution in certain areas. In a word, I am on the side of these opponents. Regardless of numerous advantages, low-cost airlines should be reduced in quantity to avoid bad consequences for the atmosphere and human life.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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