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Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The educational activities for students after
school
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 are more important continuing to be a controversial topic. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will discuss. On the one hand, some parents prefer their children to do educational activities after
school
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 because of the intense competition in the whole world.
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, they will plan numerous academic exercise and tutorial classes for their children to ensure they can get a high ranking in
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. Most of the parents only concentrate on their children's
school
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 exam results; they believe that more superior exam results equal to a better future.
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, some parent thinks that children always waste their leisure time to playing mobile or computer, doing educational activities can take advantage of time in the right way.
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, some people think that
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 way will push children under pressure. Nowadays, the homework that
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the school
 gives a student is already over-workload. An investigation shows that Hong Kong students spend an average of 2 hours a day to complete all their homework. Meanwhile, they need to go to
school
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 for 8 hours a day, which means they need to spend 10 hours a day in the academic field. If the children need to do educational activities after
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, it will give them immense pressure and bring out a negative effect to them.
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, as the competition increase, the academic result is not the only criterion to determine the student's future. Society becomes more focused on various developments of the student.
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, parents should not limit their children only can do educational activities. Overall, I feel that it may sometime do more harm than good to give many workloads to children. We should concentrate on their other development and it will more favourable to their growth.
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