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The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.
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The line graph compares the amount of salary which is received by employees in other countries between 1993 and 2003.
It is clear that
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 the wage in
1998
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the 1998
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 year was by far the
most
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highest over the period shown. The payment
of
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for
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2003
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the 2003
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 year provided the lowest amount of salary for workers in
given
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a given
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 year. Between 1993 and 1994 ,
the
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apply
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salaries
was
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 normal and started to
rose
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rise
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 dramatically to
peak
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the peak
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 of 4
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per cent’s
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percent’s
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percent
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growth.
Then
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, in 1996, the
percent
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percentage
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 of
payment
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payments
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tripped down to
3
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the 3
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percent
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percent’s
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per cent’s
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 level. In 1997 the rate of wages strived for a high level and reached the highest index approximately in 1998.
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, that mark was not achieving the best index for a long.
Since
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 1999, it was falling down till 2003, when it saw only a small rise to approximately 1
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percent
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percent’s
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per cent’s
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 level.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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