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These day’s increasing number of overweight children in urban areas is a huge problem. What are its causes and effects on the country.

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Nowadays, children obesity is the major
problem
 in cities. The major rise in number is from
last few decades
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the last few decades
. In
this
 essay
,
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,
 I will discuss the causes behind
this
problem
 as well as its effects on the whole of the country. There are a lot of reasons for
this
 major issue
.
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.
First
 of all, in western
areas
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area
 kids mostly prefer junk food as compare to homemade cuisines. Most of these
food stuffs
(usually plural) consumer goods sold by a grocer
foodstuffs
 contain oil,
fat which
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fat, which
 results in
deposition
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the deposition
 of fat in the body and
hence
, kids become chubby. Fir instance, according to the report of ‘The Times’ the number of franchises of burgers
,
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,
 pizzas enhanced rapidly during the
last
 decade
.
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.
Moreover
, the lifestyle of families in
western world
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the western world
 is
such
 that children prefer to play video games rather than outdoor activities.
Therefore
, the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 reason is lack of parental attention due to hectic schedule towards their children’s physical activities and exercise. So,
this
 is
also
 the major cause of obesity
.
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.
Furthermore
, as children are the future of
country
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the country
. If they are not
heathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
heavy
then
 they will not be able to serve the nation in a proper way
.
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.
 To conclude, as
children
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child
 obesity is growing
problem
 in urban areas which is mainly caused by eating fast food
,
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,
 lifestyle of people, lack of exercise and excessive video gaming.
Hence
,
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,
this
problem
 will
also
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the future of
country
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the country
.

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