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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ociety has been positively changed by earlier technological developments more than recent ones.Recent technological inventions do not have the same positive effects on society as earlier technological developments.
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 positively changed peoples working conditions in the past, recent developments have far more positive effects on both home and office.
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 in its early days tremendously reduced dangerous conditions people faced at work. Whether working indoors or outdoors, Safety procedures were totally neglected before the age of
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 concentrated mainly on industry, recent inventions have considered a wide coverage of work and entertainment.

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