Throughout the history, people have dream art of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world. How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

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Nowadays, a fair amount of people
plan
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plans
is planning
to
living
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live
in an ideal
society
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. According to me, there are multiple measures to make and
Society
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perfect.
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will be achieved with Team Spirit and Unity. To embark on, there are various indispensable reasons to mark an ideal
society
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.
Firstly
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, the Paramount objective is to make and
Society
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educated. As the education can make a person good and
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achieve success in their life.
However
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, those who are
educated they
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educated, they
are aware of many things are related to their life. Meanwhile, and educated person can
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perceive by sight or have the power to perceive by sight
see
job according
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job, according
to their qualification. And education
make
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makes
a person Omniscient. Now a
days
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day
a poor people
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spend more than their salaries on
educate
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educating
for their children's bright future. As the number of educated people in a than the rate of unemployment will
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decline, however
decline however
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the above aspects related to modern
society
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.
Secondly
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the
government
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adopt
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adopts
and update the technology with the Twin objective of growth and development of the
society
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. Even nowadays the
government
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also provide
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also provides
various health facilities. So that public will not face any problem related health diagnosis. The citizens have a
government
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have to put a purse together to make an ideal
society
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. To conclude, I believe that
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government
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the government
should introduce
this
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type of a
rules
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rule
and orders which an individual can easily follow and make
an
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a
perfect Nation. As
this
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can be achieved
with
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by
the efforts of all the citizens and
government
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