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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The perspective that whether animals should be housed in a zoo or not has sparked a heated debate among many. In
this
 essay, I will shed some light on opposing sides of
this
 viewpoint and
then
 provide my own opinion. On the one hand, there are compelling reasons for wildlife to not be kept in zoos.
First
 of all, wild animals are happier in their natural habitats as they can lead their lives by freely roaming around the forest, experiencing the various seasons and being around other animals.
In addition
, they will not feel as captives bounded by an area in a zoo.
For instance
, most wild animals
such
 as lions, tigers, monkeys, et cetera seem more active and healthy in the forest as compared to the cages in zoos.
Therefore
, they can reap the benefits of nature by not being in confinement.
On the other hand
, there are some merits
for
Suggestion
of
 having zoos. The primary benefit is that it can serve as a spectacle
for
Suggestion
of
 human beings to see many different wild species
such
 as birds, mammals, reptiles, fishes, et cetera all in one place.
In addition
, people gain immense knowledge of wildlife by observing them closely; indeed, knowledge is wealth.
Moreover
, wild animals will not be preyed by their predators by being in zoos.
For example
, animals are kept apart in a zoo so that one doesn’t feed on another, whereas a lion pride can hunt, kill and consume a zebra in a forest. Having considered a range of arguments, I firmly believe that wild species should not be held in zoos; animals should enjoy their natural habitats and not be kept as captives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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