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some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent days,
newpaper
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the newspaper
newspaper
becomes
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has become
is becoming
 a major medium to get a news convenient.
However
, few
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 believe that there
are
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is
 a no connection between life of people and
news paper
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
.
That is
 why, people waste their time
to read
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reading
 it and watch on television. I completely disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, people gain a knowledge about the incidence by
newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
newspapers
, which
happend
come to pass
happened
 at worldwide and they aware
from
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of
 the some dangerous things.
For example
, one terrorists gone from the jail so, if
any people
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any, people
 see him so, easily he
catch
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catches
is caught
 by police because terrorists are dangerous for our nation and give harmful impact on the people.
Furthermore
, Students who
are graduated
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have graduated
are graduating
graduate
 from their University. So that, they easily find a
jobs
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job
 from
news paper
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the newspaper
newspaper
a newspaper
. And apply to the given time period.
In addition
, the people get aware from the current situation and get information about what to do.
For instance
, in
recent days government
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the recent days government
 of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 announced a lockdown till 3 may because of the corona virus.
Then
, people get the news about when the lockdown open and the time period for
that is
increase
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increasing
.
Moreover
, the share market is very important things for numerous people and they get
some idea about in
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some idea about
 which company they spend money. To conclude, news is directly connected with the
people
Suggestion
person's
 life and it
enhance
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enhances
 the knowledge of the people.
Also it
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Also, it
 is useful to get immediate news about the current affairs.
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