some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent days,

newpaper

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the newspaper

newspaper

becomes

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has become

is becoming

a major medium to get a news convenient.

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, few

peple

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

believe that there

are

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a no connection between life of people and

news paper

a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements

newspaper

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why, people waste their time

to read

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reading

it and watch on television. I completely disagree with

this

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statement.

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with, people gain a knowledge about the incidence by

newspaper

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a newspaper

the newspaper

newspapers

, which

happend

come to pass

happened

at worldwide and they aware

from

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the some dangerous things.

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, one terrorists gone from the jail so, if

any people

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any, people

see him so, easily he

catch

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catches

is caught

by police because terrorists are dangerous for our nation and give harmful impact on the people.

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, Students who

are graduated

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have graduated

are graduating

graduate

from their University. So that, they easily find a

jobs

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job

from

news paper

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the newspaper

newspaper

a newspaper

. And apply to the given time period.

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, the people get aware from the current situation and get information about what to do.

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, in

recent days government

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the recent days government

india

a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

announced a lockdown till 3 may because of the corona virus.

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, people get the news about when the lockdown open and the time period for

that is

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increase

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increasing

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, the share market is very important things for numerous people and they get

some idea about in

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some idea about

which company they spend money. To conclude, news is directly connected with the

people

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person's

life and it

enhance

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enhances

the knowledge of the people.

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Also it

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Also, it

is useful to get immediate news about the current affairs.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

238 words

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some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Children are now watching more television than they have ever done before. What are some of the negative effects of children watching a lot of television? Do you think young children should be allowed to watch television?

The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and government should stop spending large amount of money on their armed forces . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In many places, large chain stores are taking over the marketplace, making it impossible for small businesses to compete with them What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.