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Studies show that many criminals have a low of education. For this reason, people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree

Research indicates that most of lawbreakers have lower education extend than others. Some may argue that criminals should be educated in
prison
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 that it is the best
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 to reduce
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crime rate
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the crime rate
. I extremely degree that it is an
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 to fight against crimes. In
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 that repeated crimes can be prevented by providing proper education to lawbreakers. Crimes are capable of
learning knowledge
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learning, knowledge
 and job skill, which it is useful help for lawbreakers in the
prison
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, in my countries, our government provides ten professional teachers into a
prison
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. These teachers teach each lawbreakers different job abilities in order to have a job when they leave a
prison
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. Other more
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 to the
crime
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 rate that teacher teach their students about
detrimental effects
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the detrimental effects
 of committing. Research indicates that cognitive development happens faster among children who be taught
crime
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 situation than those who do not. For instant, it is too difficult to understand why children steal money from their parents?
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, sometime young generation thinks that stealing is a funny action, which mean that they do not cognitive
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crime
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criminalize
 is a severe problem in the society.
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, teaching children during their young play a vital role in the society. In conclusion,
imprison
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 is not the effective
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 to fight against crimes in the long run. L believe that use the better education is more essential and durable
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 to reduce the
crime
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 rate.

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