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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In recent
time
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times
, shipping
has been capturing
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has captured
 public attention,
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
the concern about environmental
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concern about the environmental
 and economical. In my perspective,
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 eating local
food
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 may have some disadvantage, yet its merits are more significant. There are some minor drawbacks of the consumption of local
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.
First
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, local
food
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 is not diversity. Because the specific
geography properties
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geography, properties
of
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in
 the region, people can only produce some kinds of the ingredient from supplier in
this
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 area.
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 why every remote area has its own “special dishes” to mark its name on the travel maps. The other demerit from eating local
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 is the potential risk of
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 shortage because of the limitation in
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 supply.
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 why the locals need to utilize
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 from the other places.
On the other hand
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, usage of regional
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 can have several advantages, which over the shadow the down side. In the environmental perspective, local
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 consumption is associated with reduced in transportation. In other word, If the traffic of importation of foreign
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 is
decline
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declining
, it will have less of carbon dioxide emission
in to
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into
 the atmosphere. From the economical standpoint, while the shipping fee have been cut off, the market price of
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 products will be more affordable. Which letting more people have the chance to buy
food
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. In conclusion, despite the negative side that local
food
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 consumption can bring in, it still does more good than harm.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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