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Nowadays some buildings such as offices and school have open space design instead of separate rooms . Why it is so ?Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 era of technology, architectural design of offices and schools get changed from cabinets to open space. I think it is a positive development as
this
 is the cheapest method to establish any building. On the one hand, buildings without rooms, doors decreases the cost of construction as well as
also
 provides employees the chance to interact with each other. Workers can discuss their viewpoints and enhance their performance in the business.
For instance
, they have lunchtime to share their ideas and to make strong bonds with colleagues whereas, in case of separate cabinets
such
 precious time is missing.
In addition
 to
this
, spacious floors are
also
 an example of eco-friendly construction. Because proper ventilation is there. So,
as a result
,
use
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the use
 of AC can be avoided which is very harmful
for
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to
health
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the health
 of people and
environment
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the environment
 as it
emitts
expel (gases or odors)
emits
omits
admits
chloro
-
floro
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Floro
 carbon particles which depletes the ozone layer around the earth and
also
 causes skin cancer in human beings. To conclude, open plan designs dominate the buildings with rooms because it is eco-friendly and
this
 design is having low cost as well as provide
chance
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the chance
a chance
to
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for
 workers to interact with each other.

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