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You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre. You want to find out more about these lessons. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In the letter ● describe how well you can swim at the moment ● explain why you want to learn to swim better ● enquire about the time and cost of the swimming lessons

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Dear Sir/Madam, Recently, I have noticed in Current India newspaper about a promotion on swimming lessons going to start on May 1st at Yorktown Apartment. I live in the same community as my family and I am willing to join swimming lessons. I already have some basic swimming knowledge, so I hope I will be eligible to start immediately your classes. In a nutshell, I want to become a professional swimmer and compete on the international platform,
in addition
, my parents are very supportive of my sports interests. I would like to know more about the cost of swimming classes,
for instance
, do you charge per lesson or course and how much is the cost ? I am flexible with the timing, if it is morning or evening, I am available to come any time of the day. Sincerely yours, Anna
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suitable writing tone
Make sure to maintain a more consistent and formal tone in the letter.
logical structure
Try to provide a clearer structure for your inquiries, perhaps by numbering or bulleting them.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses more distinctly on a single idea for better clarity.
complete response
The letter effectively covers the three required points: current swimming ability, reason for improvement, and inquiry about lessons.
greeting and closing
It has a polite and respectful opening and closing, providing a positive tone throughout.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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