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Some people believe that using a bicycle as a main form of transportation has a lot of advantages whereas others think it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few people think that using a bicycle for
transportation
 is a way
more better
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better
 than the other modes of
transportation
. In
this
 essay, I agree to a certain extent that it is good and I
also
 discuss why it cannot be a main form of
transportation
.
Bicycle
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The bicycle
 has an enormous feature which the other modes of
transportation
 does not have. It requires hard work to operate the bike which is considered as a good exercise. In fact, according to the recent statistics, cycling is the most
adviced
having the benefit of careful prior consideration or counsel
advised
advanced
 activity which are
refered
make reference to
referred
revered
offered
 by the doctors. It helps to move almost every muscle in the body. As it needs more effort to move the bike from one place to another, it motivates to generate the blood vessels more as you
respirate
regain or make up for
recuperate
report
. In India, before the
motor cycles
a motor vehicle with two wheels and a strong frame
motorcycles
 and cars came into
picture
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the picture
, it was only the bicycles which were used. There were no air pollution, noise pollution, road congestions happening until the bicycles were used as
main form
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the main form
 of
transportation
. People using bikes were healthier than that of the others who used bullock carts during early 70's.
On the other hand
, riding bicycles takes more time to reach the destination.
However they
Accept comma addition
However, they
 are safe,
economic
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economical
, and broadly used before train, bus, mopeds, they are not as fast as other modes of commutation. Trains, Buses became cheaper as they were served for
people
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the people
 by the government. Not everyone was able to afford a bicycle, but they were able to use commutes provided
in
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at
 a cheaper cost.
Although
, it resulted in pollutions, every citizen in the country is now able to travel anywhere anytime faster, and safer. The other modes of commutation
also
 gave people a chance to discover and get in touch with new people who travel along, which in turn helped to gain more contacts. In few a countries, people use public
transportation
 more than private. Technology and Industries have given its best to serve humanity in a better and subtle manner. To conclude, using
bicycle
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bicycles
 as a main form of
transportation
 has more disadvantages compared to the advantages.
However
, people can use bicycles to commute to closer destinations and to lead a healthy lifestyle.
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