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Some people use the Internet for the solution to their medical problem. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and example from your experience

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These days the
Internet
 found to be a useful resource for solution to many problems. Many people use
this
 service for having the answers to their medical issues.
However
, I believe that it has positive and negative effects on the health of human being. On the one hand, in my view, using the
internet
 for getting solutions to basic illness found to be positive aspects.
This
 is because there are many useful information written by professional doctors and many informative videos on YouTube for illness
such
 as cough and cold.
For example
, 85% of people in the world got cured due to watching videos on YouTube,
such
 as taking steam of boiling water,
instead
 of visiting with doctors, which saves the time of many doctors to look for other patients who require more attention.
Hence
, I think that getting cured with the help of useful tips and tricks from the
internet
 is a positive development.
On the other hand
, using
such
 services could bring severe implications to one’s life. As there are many websites and videos which are faked and non-informative, many patients are dying or not get cured.
For instance
, if patients are suffering from typhoid or malaria and takes the prescriptions as available on the faked websites,
this
 will result in death or partial or complete disablement.
Therefore
, the patient must visit to doctors for
such
 severe diseases rather than getting solutions on the
internet
, which makes me believe that
this
 development is a negative. In conclusion, in my believe, using the
internet
 to find the solution for the problem related to simple illness found to be positive, whereas, it is a negative as
such
 information leads to severe implications if not visited or consulted with doctors on time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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