Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?
Nowadays, travel is becoming popular among
people
where
Correct word choice
who
they
show an interest in exploring other countries' Correct pronoun usage
apply
culture
and attractive places. Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
While
some people
claim that the
Correct article usage
apply
foreigners
should pay extra charges
to see the historical and culture
attractions, others argue they should treated in the same way Replace the word
cultural
of
local Change preposition
as
people
without an extra charge. I totally disagree with the extra payment that foreigners
should pay due to
multiple reasons such
as equality. This
essay will discuss the merits and provide a conclusion with my opinion.
To begin
with, there are multiple reasons why people
believe that foreigners
should not pay extra charges
. Firstly
, tourism
is considered as
a main source of income for the government in many countries. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, they need to encourage people
to visit their country
, so they can utilize the profit to develop the country
's infrastructure and enhance the economy. For instance
, if the tourists lost
their interest in visiting the Wrong verb form
lose
country
due to
the extra charges
, the country
economic situation will be badly impacted. Change noun form
country's
Secondly
, each country
is looking to spread their culture and heritage to the globe. To do this
, they need to reduce the cost of the tourist locations, so visitors can afford to visit them and know more about the country
's history.
Furthermore
, if the country
increases the fees of the attractive location, visitors will feel that they are treated differently for
the local Change preposition
by
people
. Accordingly
, they will not feel they are welcome or safe in the country
, and this
will have a direct impact to
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on
the
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apply
tourism
. For example
, many tourists are cancelling their trips after discovering they have to pay extra charges
and they are not equally treated as local citizens.
To sum up
, tourism
has many advantages for the country
which help in developing it and provide a great source of income, either for the government or for the local people
due to
multiple
jobs it creates. Correct article usage
the multiple
However
, extra fees that the tourists should pay to visit the attractive locations will reduce the number of visitors, which impact
the Correct subject-verb agreement
impacts
country
and their citizens. I profoundly believe that the government should treat the foreigners
in the same way local people
are treated and do
not expose extra Unnecessary verb
apply
charges
to ensure they maintain a great income of
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from
the
Correct article usage
apply
tourism
and spread their heritage widely.Submitted by mythias.whyatt on
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