Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?
Nowadays, travel is becoming popular among
people
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where
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who
they
show an interest in exploring other countries' Correct pronoun usage
apply
culture
and attractive places. Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
While
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people
claim that Use synonyms
the
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foreigners
should pay extra Use synonyms
charges
to see the historical and Use synonyms
culture
attractions, others argue they should treated in the same way Replace the word
cultural
of
local Change preposition
as
people
without an extra charge. I totally disagree with the extra payment that Use synonyms
foreigners
should pay Use synonyms
due to
multiple reasons Linking Words
such
as equality. Linking Words
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essay will discuss the merits and provide a conclusion with my opinion.
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To begin
with, there are multiple reasons why Linking Words
people
believe that Use synonyms
foreigners
should not pay extra Use synonyms
charges
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, Linking Words
tourism
is considered Use synonyms
as
a main source of income for the government in many countries. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, they need to encourage Linking Words
people
to visit their Use synonyms
country
, so they can utilize the profit to develop the Use synonyms
country
's infrastructure and enhance the economy. Use synonyms
For instance
, if the tourists Linking Words
lost
their interest in visiting the Wrong verb form
lose
country
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due to
the extra Linking Words
charges
, the Use synonyms
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country
economic situation will be badly impacted. Change noun form
country's
Secondly
, each Linking Words
country
is looking to spread their culture and heritage to the globe. To do Use synonyms
this
, they need to reduce the cost of the tourist locations, so visitors can afford to visit them and know more about the Linking Words
country
's history.
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Furthermore
, if the Linking Words
country
increases the fees of the attractive location, visitors will feel that they are treated differently Use synonyms
for
the local Change preposition
by
people
. Use synonyms
Accordingly
, they will not feel they are welcome or safe in the Linking Words
country
, and Use synonyms
this
will have a direct impact Linking Words
to
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on
the
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apply
tourism
. Use synonyms
For example
, many tourists are cancelling their trips after discovering they have to pay extra Linking Words
charges
and they are not equally treated as local citizens.
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To sum up
, Linking Words
tourism
has many advantages for the Use synonyms
country
which help in developing it and provide a great source of income, either for the government or for the local Use synonyms
people
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due to
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multiple
jobs it creates. Correct article usage
the multiple
However
, extra fees that the tourists should pay to visit the attractive locations will reduce the number of visitors, which Linking Words
impact
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impacts
country
and their citizens. I profoundly believe that the government should treat the Use synonyms
foreigners
in the same way local Use synonyms
people
are treated and Use synonyms
do
not expose extra Unnecessary verb
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charges
to ensure they maintain a great income Use synonyms
of
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from
the
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apply
tourism
and spread their heritage widely.Use synonyms
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