Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays,
sport
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is one of the most developed
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sectors
in terms of motivational videos and every person that has a
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sportive
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sports
sporting
background admires professional players that sacrifice themselves for the team or for personal glory. Some people think that a
sportive
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idol is a positive model, others think that they don't have a positive role in our mindsets. In
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essay, I will discuss the two different points of view and I will give my personal opinion. On one hand, people in a
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sporting
sports
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situation think that professional athletes are normal persons that through dedication and
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stretches
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can achieve every task that they have in mind.
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, form every young child that starts to play football
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for
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the old man that does some fitting exercises, everybody dreams to achieve their goals thanks to some healthy
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.  Overall, every
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the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
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athlete tries to emulate the preferred athlete for some healthy habit and
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is admirable.
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, the environment of professional
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is not always healthy. People that are against professional athletes as idols don't like doping, rough selections and broken dreams that frustrates the 99% of the
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population.
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, the most of semi professional athletes are not well paid and have no possibility to have a life full of wealth.
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, Basketball athletes of the national
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category earn only 1000 euros and can't care of their family. In conclusion, I think that
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is a beautiful way of being motivated and is completely healthy for people that frequent it in a soft way.
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, I think that a
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life model is positive for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Role model
  • Professional athlete
  • Positive influence
  • Work ethic
  • Charitable activities
  • Endorsement
  • Overcoming adversity
  • Misconduct
  • Overemphasis
  • Physical success
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • High-pressure
  • Media spotlight
  • Perceptions
  • Behavior
  • Inspiring
  • Diverse role models
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