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computers becoming an essential part of school lesson. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion

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Nowadays to use a
computers
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computer
 in education is being more and more popular. I think that using a
computer
 to aid in education has more advantages the disadvantages. In
this
 essay I am going
to discussed
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to discuss
 the both sides.
First
 of all using a
computer
 in learning is giving to students access to a huge amount of
information
 through the internet. You can find everything what you want and need in Google. The answers
of
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to
 your question
is always prepared
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are always prepared
 for you
.
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.
 It is beneficial for students because it
take
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takes
 not a lot of time to find
information
in
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on
 the internet
then
 searching
information
 in the book
.
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.
 Using a
computers
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computer
 has
also
 disadvantages
.
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.
 If you spend a lot of time sitting in front of
computer you
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a computer, you
a computer you
 can get a problem with your
heath
the locus of feelings and intuitions
heart
health
.
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.
 Redness
,
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,
 dry eyes and incorrect
posture it
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posture, it
 effect of sitting for a long time in front of
laptop
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the laptop
a laptop
.
Futhermore you
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Furthermore, you
Furthermore you
 can have
a
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an
 issue with your muscles from prolonged immobility
.
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.
Outcome
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The outcome
 of
this
symptoms
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symptom
 is insomnia
.
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.
 I assume that using a
computers
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computer
 for
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
student
 has more pluses and a big argument is
computer
 gives us a visual aid
.
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.
 To learn
information
 through the pictures and illustration is easier
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 just to see words on paper
.
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.
 To
summing
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sum
 up we can determine that using computers became an important part of getting
education
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an education
.
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.

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