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The given charts demonstrate data about the type and reason of transportation used by Edmonton citizens

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The provided charts show data about the type and reason of transportation used by Edmonton citizens. According to the charts most people prefer to travel by
car
 and the main reasons were work and business. In the
part
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partial
chart it
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chart, it
 is illustrated that 45% of travels
was made
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were made
 by
car whereas
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car, whereas
 the light rail
tansit
a surveying instrument for measuring horizontal and vertical angles, consisting of a small telescope mounted on a tripod
transit
 was used 5%. 10% of Edmonton
citizens mostly
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citizens, mostly
 used both taxi and bus of the total transportations. As it is demonstrated in the table
,
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,
 the main purpose for using the
car
 was the
work commuting
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work, commuting
 and the percentage of it was 55, The
next
high
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highest
 percentage of Edmonton citizens were using the
car
 for business purpose which was 45. For shopping and leisure activity purposes 15% of people used cars to travel in
city
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the city
a city
cities
 and another reason for travelling was taking
children
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the children
 to school which made up 40% of the total average. Overall, the most significant type of transport is
car
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the car
 and main reason was commuting to work for
citizens
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the citizens
 of Edmonton.
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