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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#people #choices
Globally, people tend to live without extra pressure to find out any news and work in business sectors since they have more opportunities than before. It argues that whether we have a massive alternative or not. In my view, thanks to technological advances we have a lot of opportunities to do anything and its frame is expanding day by day. It's clear that the majority of people are living under the same conditions which equipped with all of necessity things to create any wanted items or destroy unwanted things by using kind of technological tools.
For instance
, one of the big delegates on it is a smart phone which given us unlimited opportunities to simplify our
life
 routines. Apart from that, social applications
such
 as Facebook, tender or LinkedIn, etc., are highly beneficial to interact with others without barriers in terms of locations, financial background, and even ethic groups.
However
, we have seen a lot of advantageous sides of the high possibilities of
this
 period, others believe that still, we are living in a sharply limited environment because of the following reasons. At
first
, we are not only limited to, use ecological sources from nature, but
also
 living under a stressful
life
 which has been created by high-tech compared to early
life
 periods. According to official reports, the cancer is dominated through the developed countries because of harsh living conditions which are being destroyed by industrializations by humans. To conclude, even we could say we have a huge opportunity to live,
however
 the artificial or highly developed conditions are being decreased chances which have already established in our
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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