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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio- diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Despite knowing the
importance
 of the ecosystem to all creatures of the earth, human activities have caused a lot of trouble and threatened many
species
. I agree that it’s time that people realise how the
importance
 of biodiversity and have to do something to save it.
First
, there are two main reasons cause the extinction of
species
 and loss of biodiversity. When humans make the industrialization, they destroy vegetation and natural habitat by cutting down a lot of trees to build new roads, sk
ycrafts,
bridges, etc. Because of that, a lot of
species
 are on the verge extinction due to their home has been destroyed by human activities.
Also
, when people hunt and harvest with high intensity that eventually threatened to that
species
.
For instance
, too frequent hunting or harvesting in an area wouldn’t leave enough time for that creature to reproduce so that leads to the de
cease i
a change downward
decrease
n the number of
species
. Some solutions that come up to
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with
this
 problem are protecting natural habitats and raise people’s awareness about the
importance
 of the ecosystem. The smallest thing that people can do to protect areas is by preserving a particular area that they lived so that human activities can be limited, we can stop it before it can be ha
ppens.
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
Furthermore
, ra
sing p
increasing in quantity or value
raising
eople’s awareness about the
importance
 of biodiversity is very important and at the top of the list. By tradition, people will be affected and more conscious of
t
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about
he ecosystem and won’t ignore it. In general, human activities have caused a serious problem on en
vironment but w
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the environment, but
the environment but
e can significantly lessen the extinction of
species
 by ta
ke a
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taking
n action right now.

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