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The table provides key information about the population, gross domestic product per person and life expectancy in four different countries.

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, there are two very noticeable features.

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, China has by far the highest number of citizens, but they have the lowest economic output per person out of the four powers.

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, the United States has the highest earnings, but the lowest life expectancy. China has the highest number of people with around 1.3 billion citizens,

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, the average person only produces $6,807 and the Chinese average age upon death is 75.2 years.

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with the USA where people earn, on average, nearly 10 times more than a normal man or woman from China. Despite

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, Americans live significantly shorter lives at just 69.2 years. The United Kingdom has the lowest population of the four countries with just under 65 million, but notably has the

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highest GDP and the highest life expectancy with $41,787 and 81.5 years respectively. Russia has a population of nearly 144 million and a relatively low GDP per capita of nearly $15,000.

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Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In recent years, many governments have brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with banning smoking in public places?

It has often been suggested that the reintroduction of capital punishment would deter the ever increasing rate of serious crime. What is your view? Do you think that capital punishment should be reinstated?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?