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the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000

the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000
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The two pie charts illustrate the data of the populace of different areas around the globe between 1900 and 2000.
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, pie charts represented a tremendous increase
of
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 the planet's population. Asia as a region was the most populated in the
contary
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contrary
country
 to the smallest number of people
lived
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 in Africa. In
details
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, the ratio of Asian and European regions declined over the century. Europe’s ratio dropped from 25% to 14%,
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 Asia declined from 60% to 54%.
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, from 1900 to 2000, the percentage of people living in Africa more than doubled
since
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 4.5% to 10%,
while
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 Latin America’s proportion almost tripled in the same period. North America’s percentage,
howeverhowever
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however however
, remained constant at 5% in 1900 and 2000. The Middle East and North Africa, a new category in 2000, represented 6% of
world
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 population.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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