In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree
There are many different jobs and occupations in the world
which
there are different fees for Each employee; I mean every Change preposition
in which
work
has a special salary. Film stars, pop musicians or sports Stars are paid too much money because they are famous and have a lot of fans Replace the word
worker
whom they
Have made them popular; It is believed that Correct pronoun usage
who
this
is a significant factor to advocate
that they Deserve what they earn.It is noteworthy that Change preposition
in advocating
this
popularity has an impact on the country's Economy, although
it's not clear. There are different aspects which government
should pay attention Correct article usage
the government
while
paying Change preposition
to while
salary
; Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
such
as the quality of the work
they do, how long do
they Unnecessary verb
apply
work
?, the severity of the work
They do and so on. However
, despite these jobs, there are other jobs which
they are paid a lot Of money for what they do. Change preposition
for which
For instance
: doctors and teachers (whom
deserve that much Salary), Change the pronoun
who
businessman
, Fix the agreement mistake
businessmen
architect
andFix the agreement mistake
architects
....
In conclusion, each job deserves to be paid based on the quality, quantity and severity of The difficulty; Replace the punctuation
...
also
as I said before, some are paid because of their popularity in the world or A country which affects the country's economy.Submitted by kimiazaheri80 on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion