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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #money #railways #roads
Nowadays train ways more profitable than the car was. And with its government expend more money to railroad than roads. I completely agree with it because railway has more benefits if we compare with car road. And
also
 there have more reasons I will discuss it in
this
 essay. More country chooses transportation in railway because it has more advantages than other ways.
For instance
, in train way haven't traffic jams and because it its more rapidly than other roads. And
also
 it is transportation, heavy things,
for example
, tanks in the
Second
 World War. With it if there had not it is hard for Russian and other country.And railroad has aspects where railway gives ways to other ways.
For example
, car ways common used than railways because it. It is good for short distance as well as in the easy weight. In result, since the country uses long distance transportation better for them railways.It is a due fact that railroad inexpensive than others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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