The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps illustrate the planned changes for the
centre
of the town of Islip.
Overall
, it is clear from maps the huge change will
be build
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a roadway around the
centre
.
Moreover
, there will be other developments in housing and shops. The current map of Islip, the town
centre
only consists of the main
road
that runs stretches from east to west.
While
the
second
map shows
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the proposed
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proposed
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to change
the
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of the
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main roadway to
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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road
and
be
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built
dual
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carriageway
road
around the
centre
. Currently, the shops
to
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the north and to the south of the main
road
.
However
, the shops on the north side will be cancelled and Demolition
it
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to make space to build the car park, bus station, new housing area, and shopping
centre
. As for the southern area of the main roadway, the size of the park will shrink in the new Islip
centre
, where new housing will be built within the ring street.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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