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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that with the vast growth of online shopping majority of stores and outlets will decline.
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 essay disagree with
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 viewpoint.
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, the majority of consumers prefer to buy commodities from regular stores and
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, online shopping has its limitations. Purchasing behaviour has always been connected with the touch and feel of the
product
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. Many people like to try and demo the
product
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 prior to making a purchase.
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, most garment stores provide a trail room for buyers to try the clothes and feel the look.
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, many consumers like to stop for coffee or soft snack while shopping that enriches their shopping experience.
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, rise in technology pave the way for e-commerce businesses. There has been a tremendous growth in the number of online stores in the recent years offering a variety of products.
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 online shopping businesses strive to attract consumers by their discounted offerings and plethora of products, but has not yet met consumers satisfaction due to limitations in delivering.
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, buying a perfume from an online store may take fewer clicks to conclude the purchase but may take weeks to receive the
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.
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 is to say that online shopping is seen as a trend among young generation it is not yet considered the prime method of shopping by most consumers. In conclusion, online shopping is providing easier methods of purchasing goods, replacing the consumer experience of touch and feel of the
product
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 cannot go away and
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 will support shops not to close in cities and towns.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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