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Some people beleive that it is necessary to reavel abraod to learn about other countries but others think that it is not necessary because all the information can be seen on TV. Give us both views with your own views

#people #beleive #reavel #abraod #countries #information #tv
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Knowledge
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 empowers a person and it can be imbibed by any means of communication or by visiting places. Couples of people believe in accumulating
knowledge
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 by exploring places abroad; others oppose
this
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 idea. Both views are going to be discussed in following paragraphs. Without
shadow
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a shadow
 of doubt, Internet and
TV
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has unfolded
Suggestion
have unfolded
 various dimensions of
knowledge
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.
Additionally
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, people can access to any aspect of
knowledge
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 of any part of the world by watching
TV
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 and surfing
web sites
a computer connected to the internet that maintains a series of web pages on the World Wide Web
websites
 without going to places across the globe and incurring heavy expenditure avoiding hassles of travelling.
Therefore
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, these communication modes have made it possible and economical imparting virtual
knowledge
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.
On the other hand
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, the real experience sought by people by visiting the exotic places in real make people more confident and knowledgeable which a person can not merely by viewing or glancing them on
TV
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 or
internet
Suggestion
the internet
;
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;
moreover
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, visiting places make people familiar with various
culture
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cultures
 and language. It not only familiarizes them with
number
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a number
 of
places but
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places, but
also
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 widens their mental horizon. Gaining plethora of virtual
knowledge
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 without heavy expenses and getting accessible to everyone makes
TV
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 and internet powerful tool of
knowledge
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;
nevertheless
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, people can obtain real
knowledge
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 and become
confident personality
Suggestion
a confident personality
 by wandering to myriad places in the world.

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