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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016
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The given line graph illustrates information about
stock
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the stock
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 values of four high-tech companies from 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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, Facebook's value slightly increased,
while
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 Yohoo's decreased. Apple's
stuck
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stock
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 price fluctuated during the
period
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 and
unfortunately
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,unfortunately
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 Google was not as popular as others,
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that
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which
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 is why stayed relatively unchanged in these years. Facebook started the
period
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 with approximately 7500 stocks and
this
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 consistently moved up to a peak point
around
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of around
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 20.000 in 2016.
Yohoo
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Yahoo
 began the recorded
period
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 at the same time
,
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apply
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 but rapidly dropped year by year, until it reached about 2500 in
final
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its final
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 years. Apple stocks
was
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were
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 valued at just below 5000 in 2011 and jumped considerably to nearly 35.000 the following year before plummeting to around 7000 in 2013,
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however
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it
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they
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 recovered slightly in 2014 to around 12000 and just over 5000
and
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apply
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of the
period
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. Google company shares remained at around 1000 for the entire
period
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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