The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
this
modern era a number of technology advancement
are developed
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is developed
and
internet
is one of them.
Im agree
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I agree
I'm agree
I'll agree
I agreed
I've agreed
with the statement that everyone will behave in the same
way
in the near future. In fact, I feel
this
way
for two
reason
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reasons
. For the
first
, plenty of teen prefer to get knowledge from different
internet
resources. It is a striking aspect of the
internet
user and it leads to similarity in their knowledge and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. The underlying reason is that a lot of materials are copied from other web and they have no idea about a topic.
Consequently people
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Consequently, people
and especially student just absorb other ideas and explanation and they do bot try to deeper and understand main principle and
feature of articles
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feature articles
. For the
second
, social network
define
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defines
the
way
how people live.
However
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However, such
such
media resources become the main
way
of spending free time, so people just stare at smartphones everywhere and a lot people suffer from the similar disease because they use the same gadgets, they have lifestyle and they have similar hobbies
such
as scrolling a
celebritys
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celebrity's
celebrity
newsfeed
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Newsfeed
in the
instagram
.
To
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In
conclusion im
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conclusion, I'm
conclusion I'm
of the opinion that because of the
internet
people have the same passion and lifestyles that lead to several
effect
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effects
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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