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Describe an electronic device you use often You should say: How long you have had it How often you have used it What you have used it for and explain why use it so often

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I have several electronic devices which I
use
 very often. I'm going to talk about my
laptop
. It's really useful and helps me a lot with my studies, work and relaxation. The
laptop
 has become an essential part of my life and I can hardly think of a day without it. It has been about 4 years since my father decided to buy me a
laptop
 to congratulate me on getting admitted to university. After a long time, I always keep my
laptop
 clean and It looks like new. I
use
own
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laptop
 all the time and I find it convenient to
use
 my
laptop
 because it’s small and light, I can bring it everywhere. In the classroom, I often
use to
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apply
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take notes
instead
 of writing by hand because
of
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apply
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typing is
quickly
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quick
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 and
accurately
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. I think that every student should have their own
laptop
 at school so that they can finish their assignments with friends.
Besides
, I don't even need to be at the company, I can work from home with just my
laptop
.
In addition
 to studying, I often
use
 the
laptop
 to relax as /es/ surfing the web, listening to music, or playing video games. I 've used the
laptop
 so often because it's really useful and it has a lot of functions and features which have made my life easier.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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