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An increasing number of professionals, such as, teachers and doctors are leaving their own countries to work in developed countries. What are the causes of this problems? What solutions can you suggest?

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These days, as competition has increased and the number of jobs is almost the same, a surge of educated people can be seen going abroad to work in developing nations. In
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 essay, I will propose possible reasons for
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 behaviour and will provide a possible solution for the same.
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 with, one of the most repeated arguments proposed by the people is that there are few jobs, career growth is slow
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, occupations are less rewarding.
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, having a decent
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 is very hard to get and promotions are less likely.
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, it was found in a research that for an officer
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job having
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job, having
 occupancy 20, about 10,000 people applied for the
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.
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, the pay scale for these people are very low and there is always
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 uncertainty. Foremost, government should take the initiative to create opportunities for the educated unemployed, investing public fund to produce jobs will definitely help to boost the economy and will decrease the migration of skilled people.
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, opening government schools, offices, and banks will significantly reduce the count of unemployment.
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, the country will be more self sufficient and it will lose less professional. To encapsulate, foreign land provides loads of opportunities and it lures the people of poor countries, as these countries have less jobs. Personally, I believe government should take the responsibilities on their shoulders and should work with public to mitigate
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 serious issue.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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