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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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From my everyday experience and observation I can claim that discussion of an important
decision
 with other people b
ring
Suggestion
brings
many benefits. In the following paragraphs I will give my reasons to defend
this
 statement.
First
 of all, different people have different opinions. In order to make the right choice people should discuss every possible
decision
 and its consequences. Making an important
decision
 alone can bring many negative aspects.
For instance
, a person can reveal his selfishness or impatience and the consequences of that
decision
 can e
ffect
have an effect upon
affect
many people in the future. I think t
hat
Suggestion
that's
a good and wise
decision
 can be born only in discussion because people can share their knowledge and experiences a look at the problem from different sides and aspects.
Second
 of all, I think that making
d
ecision
Suggestion
a decision
decisions
alone is unacceptable especially for a
company
. Imagine that a chief makes the
decision
 about increasing a production line without discussing it with his employees. In
this
 case a part of
company
's profit w
ill be spend
Suggestion
will be spent
on extended purchase of raw materials. So, s
hare holders
someone who holds shares of stock in a corporation
shareholders
will be left without dividends.
This
decision
 may lead to getting rid of
company
's shares and
as a result
 of
this
 declining the value of a
company
 as a whole. To sum up, I think that a person should always consult his relatives or colleges when making an important
decision
 to avoid possible mistakes.
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