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Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, schools
play
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are playing
 a crucial
role
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 in a better life and future job opportunities. Some people believe that teachers are more responsible for preparing children to be upstanding. While others believe while children enter school parents are still responsible. I believe, the
role
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 of schools and teachers in
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 period is more prominent. On the one hand, some people are of the opinion that parents are solely responsible for teaching their children. From their point of view, since parents are far more concerned about the upbringing of their children than any others.
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, they serve a significant
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 in their child’s life and learn them how to interact with their peers and conform with the rules of a community. It
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is also maintained
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 maintaining that, people who live in the deprived area suffer from the
luck
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
lack
 of school and teaching amenities so they have no choice to be learned in the house.
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, many commentators justifiably argue that there are advantages to teaching students at schools.
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, children
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 long hours in school when they turn seven and by improving financial problems parents are less likely to have enough time to spend with their children.
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, teachers undergo training in order to learn how to share their knowledge with the
next
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 generation. So teachers are given a high salary in developed countries because their
role
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 is undeniable. To sum up, in my opinion,
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 parents might have the important effect on children, assigning the task of teaching
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in
 schools yield a positive result.
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