We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries

People

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with

needed globally are increasing rapidly, desperately begging for aid financially and mentally. Some

argues

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argue

have argued

that it is impossible to support people outside their local communities and home countries. Personally, I completely disagree with the statement,

instead

I think we should consider the world we live in as a whole and seek to give assistance to anyone who needs it domestically and internationally.

First

and foremost, one of the most significant

lesson

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lessons

we were taught is to be a genteel and productive citizen so as to make contributions to the society. “To give is to receive” is the foundation of human ethic and admirable virtue, we should be selfless and divert our attention evenly regardless nationality, age or gender.

Secondly

, supporting

neighbor

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbour

countries is an effective approach to build bridges between countries,

thus

bond

farther along in space or time or degree

beyond

a friendly relationships and boost economy’s growth.

This

is beneficial for both sides and would prompt to a long-lasting and robust

businesses

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business

to help more people.

For instance

, since the establishment of the European Union, the countries had developed prosperously and citizen life’s quality had improved drastically because their government supportive relationship. As a matter of fact, obviously we should take care of our own community as well as treating our

neighbors

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbours

. The government ought to implement suitable policies for the poor, diverts their resources to

children

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children's

education and society’s health as oppose to invest in arm forces and war. If

this

measure is imposed and execute outright, a much more well-trained workforces would be available to stimulate the country

economic

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economically

. In conclusion, we should not demarcate people to decide if they are worth-helping. Improving international relationship and education is the best method to support the poor and strengthen the

economic

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economy

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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286 words

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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international cooperation
ethics
moral obligation
geographical borders
diplomatic relations
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global security
resource allocation
expertise
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dependency and development
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local and global initiatives
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