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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There are many advantages for children to start learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 rather than secondary
school
.
First
 of all
,
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,
 they can learn the
language
 more quickly and they can be more fluent than they start to learn it at secondary
school
. Because it is said that there is a limit of age for one can learn a foreign
language
as
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at
 the same level of their native
language
. It is
remarkable especially
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remarkable, especially
 when children learn
language
 before they learn writing and reading in their native
language
. Once children learn writing and reading in their native
language
,
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,
 they tend to learn a foreign
language
 with their native letters. It makes it difficult to learn the foreign
language
 difficult and deprive their fluency in
foreign
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a foreign language
language
. Following that, the
next
 advantage is that children can
widens
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widen
 their point of view in their early age. Once they learned a foreign
language
, their world would expand, they can gather information in both different languages and they can talk to people from different nationalities and they can learn more flexibly. There are
also
 disadvantages for children to learn a foreign
language
 at their early age.
First
, Children might be late for having the ability to express in their native
language
 and
also
 in a foreign
language
,
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,
 because they should learn different
language
 before they master their mother
language
. If you cannot know how to express yourself completely, you cannot
also
 do in a foreign
language
. In Japan, young generation
don’t know
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doesn’t know
 complicated Japanese character, Kanji.
Second
, to learn
language
 takes time, to put the
language
 class into their schedule means, they have to give up
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 class.
However
, learning a foreign
language
 after you
grown
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have grown
 up takes much time and effort compared with children
.
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.
 You have to give up many things. In
this
 reason, from my point of view, it is better for children to start learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
.

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