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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear____

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Dear Joy, It was a really pleasant surprise to receive a letter after
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 a long time. Thank you for considering taking my advice from me. For sure you would enjoy the camp a lot because it has lots of activities to do.
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, you will get insight from different people over there and it will help to boost your networking skills as well.
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, you will find diverse cultures and communities to learn from them.
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, you might have to face some bad weather conditions, as in areas like these weather predictions may not always be correct. I highly recommend you stay hydrated and keep some common symptoms medicine handy. Other than that few minor discomforts you could feel for not getting food properly and on time or unclean washrooms. so just relax and
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 know you will overcome these challenges with your positive attitude and smiling face. I hope I can join you but,
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 my business commitments, I cannot leave my work right now for these many days. For sure, we will plan some adventurous trips together next spring. Well, let me finish here. I will be eagerly waiting for your letter, on how was your entire experience. Have a safe and wonderful camping. Yours faithful, Dhruvi Nathwani.
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task achievement
Ensure all parts of the question prompt are fully addressed to improve task achievement.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent level of formality throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Use clear separators between ideas for even smoother transitions.
coherence cohesion
The letter starts with a warm greeting and ends with a considerate closing.
task achievement
The writer maintains a friendly and supportive tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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