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Last Wednesday you flew from London to Vancouver. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, you should explain: where and when you lost your bag what your bag looks like what its contents were

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to report the loss of my
grip
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
baggage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 while my trip to London from Vancouver through one of your
flight
Fix the agreement mistake
flights

It seems that flight may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 week on
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 week Wednesday. Since it was a midnight arrival; I slept and I would have forgotten my
grip
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 luggage. To be precise; I kept my
grip
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
baggage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in an over-head
baggage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 storage compartment respective to seat number E22; flight number was AK 702 and the date I travelled was 26 April 2020. My
grip
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
baggage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's brand is Samsonite, black
colour
Change preposition
in colour

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 and 24inch sized. I have my name tag tied to it with my name Chandra mention of it. Listed here with items I carried in my bag; a brown GAP branded jacket, a book titled ‘Win the world’ a
gift wrapped
Add a hyphen
gift-wrapped

It appears that gift wrapped is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 transformers toy for my son and 3 Cadbury chocolate packets. I have enclosed my flight ticket for you to verify
my
Change the word
the

The word my may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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 details I have mentioned above. My contact details are
in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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departure
Correct article usage
the departure

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 ticket. I request you to kindly do the needful. Yours sincerely, Chandra

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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