Some people think that parent should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give reasons.

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People should try to be flexible and observe required etiquettes in the

society

which leads to make a better communication. Some people believe that primary principles should be taught in schools by teachers,

in contrast

, the other

think

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thinks

that parents have the most prominent effect on teaching children how to behave in accordance social rules and traditions.

Firstly

, a group of people believe that children before enrolling in schools are in sensitive age groups (1-6) year old, and as everybody know, they can pass acquisition of any new knowledge faster and easier than adults.

Therefore some

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Therefore, some

people believe that should start teaching social principles in

this

period.

Moreover

, a numerous researches have illustrated that children are affected by their parents in comparison with other people in various aspects.

As a result

any education about social

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

is more effective.

For example

, my close friend told me that if she heard about the innate cognition of children, she would have started teaching her daughter about social

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

sooner than before.

Thus

, that’s why some people think parents have

crucial role

Suggestion

a crucial role

to teach children how to be good in the

society

Secondly

in contrast

, some others

thin

judge or regard; look upon; judge

think

thing

that required education for teaching children in

this

field should be done by schools. They believe that teachers are subject specialists for

this

job and purpose.

Furthermore they

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Furthermore, they

have predefined curriculum. As

consequence

Suggestion

a consequence

, they can achieve the best result in

this

way and they can influence on children effectively.

Moreover students

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Moreover, students

do various activities in teams which leads

to learn

Suggestion

to learning

how to behave in a

society

, enforce the rules and be

flexible

Suggestion

flexibly

practically.

For instance

, my niece who had been passing her high

school which

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school, which

had a lot of courses with team work activities is too interested in living in Chicago with huge population and numerous difficulties that a large number of people

cant’t

Suggestion

can’t

cant

stand tolerating them.

Thus

that’s why some people believe that schools are responsible for teaching children how to be a good one in a

society

. In sum up, a number of people believe that because of innate cognition of in age group (1-6) year old and their effectiveness by parents, parents should teach them required social principles.

In contrast

, some others think that cause of predefined curriculum and availability of professional teachers in schools, schools can get

better achievement

Suggestion

a better achievement

this

field.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

391 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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