Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree ?

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hundred years people have made monumental developments in technology and

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mechanical

systems.

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, robots

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have become

common devices in any part of the

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department

. Some people believe that working hours can be

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reduced, resulting

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enhancement. Yet, from my point of view, decreasing work time bring about some destructions on people

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as the impoverish.

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, these technologies do not without people. In

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essay will argue my opinion with some examples. On the one hand, more and more factories benefit from numerous automation. We cannot neglect the presence of robots in the production process.

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, these machines depend on

labor

a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages

labour

. To put it another way, the people who use all of the robots have to stay with those machines. The absence of people, while machines are working means that there is no person who has to

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supervise

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, advancements in

technic

a practical method or art applied to some particular task

technique

techniques

take the noticeable load from above people’s shoulders. To illustrate, the latest aircraft has awesome interesting systems as regards flying and the aircraft can warn pilots beforehand. Since, the systems rely on people

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, reducing working hours can affect people inherently. Due to the fact that, companies think that employees are not a necessity that much.

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, some people can be dismissed from employment by the boss. As a consequence, these people have become poverty.

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case, the remuneration of workers and the welfare of society diminishes.

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, the number of underprivileged people increases.

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, my uncle has undergone because of dismissing from his work. To

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conclude

, developments in technology bring about much more convenience to us.

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, people have to stay at every stage of production. It cannot think that a process is not done without

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the workers

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Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree ?

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