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Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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The invention of
television
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 is one of the greatest humankind’s inventions. Undoubtedly,
television
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 is one of the best sources of entertainment, people watch
television
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 to find out the latest news, weather and sports and many other things happening around the globe. Presently people are influenced by
television
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 so much. The influence of
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 can be both negative and positive both. To look on the positive influence of
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, it is
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a source
the source
 of knowledge and information about everything happening in
different culture
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different cultures
a different culture
 and different regions of the world. It gives the information about things taking place worldwide and keeps us
update
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updated
 with every current affairs. As
television
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 is present in every remote area today, it is a great medium to create awareness about
social issue
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social issues
a social issue
 and every news as well as it is the best source of entertainment for them. They broadcast shows which are full of knowledge and help to improve English and general knowledge.
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, I improved my English in high school by watching English drama and movies. But again we do see so much of negative impacts on
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.
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, kids getting so much exposed to
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 and watch
such
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 shows which are unauthentic
such
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 as, crime related shows. As it is well said that “excess of everything id bad”
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 watching
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 for so long is bad. So, parents must be careful about what and for how long their kids are watching
television
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. All in all, everything has advantages and disadvantages. It totally depends on the person to what he is learning.
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