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Some people believe that to become successful in sports one should have a natural talent. Others think that practice is a crucial part to success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that modern constructions are disagreeable and look like a disrupted place in a town, particularly when these buildings are very different from other constructions that are located around them whilst others are of the opinion they add unrepeatable beauty and variety for the town. I think there is some truth in both views and reasons will be given below. Modern buildings
such
 as the Eiffel tower or Princes tower can be appealed as well as can attract people around the world and citizens from many countries of the earth may spend their time interestingly in these places. Modern constructions never lose their crucial importance, that’s why the government may earn a large amount of
money
 from visiting strangers to contemporary places in the country.
Moreover these
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Moreover, these
 places can be known as a symbol of the country. One example that springs to my mind is the Eiffel tower, which is the symbol of France attracts 5.5 million strangers in per year from all sides of the world, so government can earn a great deal of
money
 from visiting tourists.
On the other hand
, many of the modern constructions were built urgently. So they lose the town’s attractiveness as well as beauty.
For instance
 the Elephant Building
that is
 located in Bangkok was thought to become the most attractive place of the country.
However due
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However, due
 to builders’ mistake, it is one of the ugliest buildings around the world. I think it was a waste a lot of
money
 on building unnecessary construction. To sum up, modern constructions play a key role in earning
money
 for the government if it is not built by mistake.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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