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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is observed that, in the early
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 before twenty, individual's lives are excess happening than being an adult.
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 essay will elucidate both the views, so that a plausible conclusion can be formed. At the outset, I would like to put some light on the
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 when we were in the college, because,
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 the time when we were free from any kind of responsibility and protocol.
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, we had not had to think about the source of income as our parents were responsible for that all, we just had to focus on the studies, the only tension to take, rest, everything was freely available to enjoy.
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, when a person is developed, there are different types of responsibilities to take care of. I have an example of my own experience, there is my friend, who was a person with a very jolly nature, but, when he was at the
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 when he had to look over some major duties, he forgets to live happily and now he even does not remember his past, the period of enjoyment, even he has forgotten the juice of the
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, responsibilities make you grow in
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 and you see the real meaning of
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 when you take care of others in terms of money and privileges you enjoy more when you see smiles on some body's face because of you. To recapitulate, I would make
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 more explicit, that, It is believed that, one should never forget his/her childhood because,
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 nature helps you to fight with the upcoming
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 disasters. So, I think that teenage days are more enjoyable than adult
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 because we live our
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 for our own because, the rest of the
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 is for others
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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