The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5
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The graph shows the
number
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of commuters using
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London
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the London
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Underground, the national
rail
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network
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and the light
rail
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and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.
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, the
number
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of passenger
journeys
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made on the three systems increased, but on
London
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Underground
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it increased dramatically. The most striking figure was that one billion
journeys
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were made a year on the national
rail
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network
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in the 1950s. At that time, the
London
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Underground was carrying around 750
million
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passengers and they fell to 500
million
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in 1980 compared to 600
million
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on the national
rail
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network
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. From the beginning of the 1980s, the
number
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of passenger
journeys
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on all three main ways of transport rose rapidly. The
number
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of passengers on
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London
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the London
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Underground and the national
rail
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network
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were
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very similar throughout the remaining period, rising to approximately 1.1 billion in 2004/5. The period ended with the national railway slightly higher than the starting point and
London
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Underground in
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place with just under 1 billion passengers and light and metro
at
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in
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third
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place with approximately 200
million
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passenger
journeys
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, london, rail, network, journeys, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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