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Band 4.5

Many people work from home using modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not the employer. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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this
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 technological era, it has become common
that
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people
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work
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 from
home
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instead
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 of working in the company. Some
people
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percieve
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perceive
 it is only beneficial for
employees
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. In my opinion, I disagree with that view, it brings
adventages
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advantages
 to both workers and
employers
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. There's no doubt that working from
home
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 is
time
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-saving and cost-saving for
employees
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. Since
people
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usually
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 stuck on the way to
company
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the company
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 during rush hours, they would spend
massive
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time
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in
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commuting.
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, the likelihood of being late or
absence
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 is likely to increase.
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, remote
work
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 is more economical.
Employers
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 can save on costs related to office space, utilities, and maintenance when
employees
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work
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 from
home
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. So,
people
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 can spend more
time
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 with their family and allocate their spare money to improve their living quality. Admittedly, some
people
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 contend that there
is
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 no benefits for
employers
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 and the company because working from
home
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 via technology is inefficient. As
employers
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 couldn't communicate with their co-workers face to face,
which
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it
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 makes it harder to tackle tasks.
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, some
employees
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 lack
of
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self-descipline
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self-discipline
so that they might fail to finish their
work
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 on
time
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 without supervision.
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, workers are able to make use of technology to
work
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 effectively,
such
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 as video calls and online meetings, without the
limitation
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limitations
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 of space and
time
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. What's more, remote
work
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 can improve job satisfaction for
employees
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have
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more
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a more
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 flexible working schedule and allocate their
time
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 more freely. In
this
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 situation, they will
work
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 harder In conclusion, remote
work
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 does cause reasonable worries, but these can be solved thanks to advanced technology. Ultimately, not only can it bring benefits to
employees
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' well-being,
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but
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it can
also
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 lead to increased employee productivity, which benefits
employers
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 as well.

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coherence
The essay gives a clear view but needs more clear links and stronger development of each idea. Give specific reasons and simple evidence to back your view.
structure
Use topic sentences and order ideas so each paragraph has one main idea. Use simple linking words to show how ideas connect.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell errors. Use common and correct forms, for example 'advantages', 'self-discipline', 'missing words'.
task response
The writer states a clear position in the introduction.
coherence
There is effort to link ideas with connectives like 'Moreover' and 'What's more'.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • employee productivity
  • cost savings
  • talent pool
  • geographical limitations
  • monitoring productivity
  • company culture
  • employee satisfaction
  • turnover rates
  • communication challenges
  • collaboration
  • efficiency
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
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