Many people cant speak or present well in public, an idea is to start training from the school.State if it is important to speak well in public.Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays illegal
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Nowadays, illegal
acts among youngsters have increased substantially in many territories.
there
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There
must be several reasons and solutions for
this
matter which will be discussed throughout
this
essay
such
as social media and
paucity
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the paucity
of parental control that I think can be solved with the supervision of parents and holding
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
sessions.
on
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On
the one hand, social media is playing a vital role in today's modern life,
thus
making it more challenging for fathers and mothers to manage their children because they can see a lot of
contents
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content
which can make them do undesired things
such
as delinquency.
for
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For
instance, there was a teenager that held up a gathering
in
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at
their house through online social
media which
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media, which
it ended up for him to be arrested.
because
Suggestion
Because
of drugs that other members of the gathering brought with them to use throughout the party.
on
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On
the other hand, there are solutions to deal with
this
problem that made many people exhausted.
one
Suggestion
One
of which could be more supervision of
parents especially
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parents, especially
on social media utilizing enrolling their children in sports activities and other helpful activities which can make them busy.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, holding
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
sessions at some point can make them back to normal life with the help of psychologists and other experts.
to
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To
sum up, parents or guardians should be more aware of what their children do so that in case of troubles they can manage the situation and help them out
.
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.
under
Suggestion
Under
these circumstances teenagers could be more
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
about their precious life.
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