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Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

#topic #cars #people
Everyone knows that nowadays
use
of
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the use
 cars is getting more popular because of people's diverse necessities. Cars have a main role to play in our lif
e as
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lives
 most people in our country
use
 cars so as to go to work and earn money. The cars make a close our remote distance and improve our rel
ation other countries, s
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relation to other countries
pecifically our country exports numerous products via cars to other countries and a great number of tourists come to our country by cars. On the whole, the cars are whatsoever for our lifestyle, but the unlimited
use
 of cars is likely to cause many problems. As for a lot of problems of the unlimited
use
 of cars, they may bring on various diseases and cause many disastrous sit
uation. D
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situations
iseases can include headaches, eye diseases, whereas disastrous situation includes car accident and breaking down of cars.
Also
 the cars damage atmosphere now that the cars produce plenty of different toxic gas
ses. W
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gas
hen all people
use
 the cars at the same time, that situation leads to traffic jams.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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